The Greensman

"Geek Love" treatment



Here is the treatment (that's a blow-by-blow outline) for "Geek Love", the film I'm going to be writing in the next term. It's slightly shorter than it should be, so if you have any suggestions for subplots, what needs to be fleshed out, etc, that would be appreciated. On the other hand, it is fifteen pages (double-spaced), so be warned before you click

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    Bowling For Soup
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New story and a couple observations

This story is the first draft of something I turned in for our last fiction workshop. I have some ideas for revising it, like adding a little more back story to flesh it out a bit (I wrote it the night before it was due, which is why it's so short), but other suggestions are welcome too. It's a prose adaptation of a song that Damien Rice did, called Cheers Darlin'. I'll probably change the title later so it's not so....stolen....haha, but I was in a hurry.

I also want to point out that, yes, the group activity has diminished since we first got started, but that when something is posted I try to leave at least some sort of comment (though I admittedly don't always succeed), and so does hydingjekyll, but that when either of us posts something, other than commenting on each other's stuff, everyone else rarely offers feedback themselves. Instead of trying to point the finger at anyone, all I want to do by saying this is point out that I might as well just send stuff to him outside of the group. It's getting rather pointless for me to leave stuff here. So I'd kind of like to know if I should just go that route and not put stuff here anymore. I joined this originally because I thought it was going to be more of an actual community, rather than a sporadic, two-way conversation. :-\ Anyway, here's the story.


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The Greensman

Alt-Structure Story

Okay, guys. Here's the same story I posted here a week or two back, only this time with an alternative structure. I don't think it works quite as well, but it's still enjoyable (IMHO), and gave me some ideas for revising the original version.
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Enjoy the evil.

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    Supposed to be TMBG, but my mp3 player's acting up
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By the way...

If anyone's planning on offering feedback, I'd appreciate it if you could do so by the end of the weekend because I want to write my revision for school by Monday. If that's not enough time for people to do it, don't worry it's not a big deal, I just wanted to mention that there's a time frame for immediate usefulness of commentary :) Thanks.
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This is my newest workshop story for school. I've received some feedback on it from some of the students, so part of putting it here is an experiment to see if y'all have the same problems with it, in order to gauge exactly how important it is that I change them, or if they were just being weird, haha. So um, enjoy, hopefully, and lemme know what sticks out.

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"Inclement Weather"

Wrote this one under the "Inclement Weather" Theme. First time where the middle of the story just evolved. I knew the entire story that I wanted to take place except why he took his mask off. It came to me and wrapped up in the end rather well, just while writing it. That's what I like about story telling. You get to figure out as you go what story you be tellin'.


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This is a personal essay that I wrote on the downside of feminism. I don't normally write non-fiction so I imagine there's a lot of problems with it. Please, please let me know how I can make it better and more coherent.

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